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Some people prefer to live in a big city. Others think it is better to live in a small town. Discuss both views.

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Since always, one of the main and crucial choices about what we have to do before we occupying any place is to decide where to live. While lots of people are trying to make sure they live in a big
city
, many individuals would like to live in a small
town
. In the 21st century, more and more people want to live in a big
city
.
First
 of all, one of the reasons why individuals want to live in a large
city
 is more facilities.
For example
, in these cities, there are lots of
convenience especially
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convenience, especially
 for
the young age category
Suggestion
younger age categories
younger age category
youngest age category
the youngest age category
the younger age category
 like, more choice
to
Suggestion
of
 spent leisure time, even better education, and whatever you want to have an exciting life.
Secondly
, while you live in economic trouble in a small
town
, lots of job opportunities definitely can wake you up from your nice bed in a small
town
 and drive you to the nearest large
city
. These are some occasion reasons that everyone desire to go to full-grown cities which bring their
more comfortable
Suggestion
most comfortable
 and relief life. The following lines will give some reasons for us that there are some people would like to go to a small
town
 and live there; their passion is intelligible!
First
 of all, in the crowded
city
 access to calmness life is decreased. They would want to go far away from those cities which only lead us to social anxiety, more daily fight and go to a small
town
 to find peace.
Secondly
, smaller commuter volume, a low number of cars and factories release fewer pollutants in the air and water which has led to a healthier environment.
For instance
, in the west of
Iran where
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Iran, where
 there are smaller towns than central Iran so that we have less pollution in the environment. In conclusion, some people feel living in big cities have more benefit to
them
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them, although
although
 others
interest
Suggestion
interested
 in go to a small
town
 and have a garden to grow chickens and roosters.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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