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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than the secondary school Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#expert #children #language #school #outweigh
Few
professional consider
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professional, consider
 the right choice for the children is
start
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starting
 to learn a
second
 language when they are at primary school than in the secondary. In my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 are more benefits than
loses
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losing
lose
. In the actuality be able to speak another language is the key for a great
opportunities
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opportunity
.
Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
 of the people are able to communicate in a different dialect around the world. There are proofs that show the brain of a
kids it's
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kids, it's
kid it's
kid kid it's
 like a sponge so will be easy for them to learn a different language at the same time that they develop their skills to talk, of
course can
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course, can
 cause delay of talking properly or feel
confuse
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confused
 at the beginning but a think it's the best option. In our childhood we are not shy at all so means we just speak as the thing came across our
mind but
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mind, but
 as we get
old
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older
 we feel insecure; we are
scare
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scared
 to make mistakes so we try to avoid
to make
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making
 them.
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