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‘Evaluate the usefulness of Bigelow and La Gaipa’s work for understanding children’s friendship.’

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In the 70s,
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related
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 in the field of psychology focused mainly on the study of emotional bonds between people. Researchers reduced the role of children's
friendship
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 to the question of what makes them feel attracted to each other? Understanding the phenomenon of
friendship
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 in the context of psychology was very limited. In 1975, Brian Bigelow and John La
Gaipa
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 researched changes in the way children perceive and define
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friendship depending
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friendship, depending
 on their age and stage of development.
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 will evaluate the usefulness of their findings and its
further
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 influence on the process of shaping the understanding of children's friendships.
Initially
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, Bigelow and La
Gaipa
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's intention was to explore the differences in children's expectations towards their best friends at different stages of development. Researchers were particularly interested in exploring changes in the perception of friendships that occur as the children grow up. Equally, their innovative
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 has opened a new chapter in understanding child
friendship
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- an issue that has been completely unnoticed by psychology up to
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 point. To explore how children understand
friendship
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, Bigelow and La
Gaipa
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 asked them to write an
essay
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, describing the relationship with the same sex best friend. Their task was to indicate the differences between expectations towards best friend and other colleagues.
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, researchers did not consider
friendship
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 between children of different sexes, which could have an impact on the results of their
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. To conduct
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, Bigelow and La
Gaipa
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 collected 480 essays written by children of different sexes at the age between 6 to 14 years. They came from lower-middle-class and upper-working-class families. Eight different schools based in Windsor, Ontario, Canada joined the study. 30 boys and 30 girls were appointed from each of them to take part. A large sample group was undoubtedly an asset.
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, the method of selecting participants for the studies could result in a sampling error. The
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 has
also
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 devalued the influence of culture in understanding children's
friendship
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. Before Bigelow and La
Gaipa
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 began the studies, they created a list of different characteristics that children could want to include when describing their best friend. Researchers divided the list into 21 categories and
then
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 used content analysis in each
essay
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.
Furthermore
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, they were able to quickly analyse samples of 480 essays by subordinating characteristics to already defined categories and applying frequency count. An additional advantage of the method used was the possibility of comparing differences in
understanding friendships
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understanding, friendships
 between children of different ages or opposite sex. The applied generalization significantly contributed to the development of understanding of
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 between children.
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, its limitation
was strictly subordinating
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strictly subordinated
 the characteristics of
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 to predetermined coding.
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 a solution excluded the inclusion of
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 traits indicated by the children in the
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 if their reasoning did not fit into categories created by the researchers. In view of the above, I suspect that the method could have contributed to affecting
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 findings by confirmatory bias.
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, the transformation of qualitative into quantitative data likely caused the loss in the understanding of individual and personal dimensions on the studied children.

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