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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer

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Technological improvements affect our lives in tremendous ways. Each designed car model increase safety standard and reduce
fuel
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 requirement per mile. But, unfortunately, each created device affects nature atrociously because of fossil
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 usage.
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 essay is about possible opportunities o
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in
alternative
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energy
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 and why it needs to be taken care of.
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 of all, the main reason why the
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energy
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 is needed to be prioritised is global warming. It has become a serious concern in the world and the underlying reason for
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 happening is carbon dioxide emission. Reduction of
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 perilous emission of carbon dioxide could put us one step ahead and the easiest way to reach
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 goal is the use of
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energy
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 in our daily life for different reasons
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 as driving cars, flying planes and to run heaters.
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, fossil
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 plants collect limited source which will be depleted eventually. Due to
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 fact, it is the most expensive
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 source for today and will be in the future until its extinction.
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, anyone who wants to collect
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 should build expensive plants and
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 of
this
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 sector is controlled by big companies that are known as main subsidises and profiteers of wars.
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, economic effects of
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 make world peace nearly impossible. Many wars erupt because of
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 material most people concern that "World War III" will strike because of it.
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, safe
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energy
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 receives its
power
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 from nature.
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 as, h
ydropower
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plants, solar
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 farms and wind
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 tribunes. Because of these, p
ossibilities
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the possibilities
of
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 limitless
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 are way too higher than fossil
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.
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, anyone who wants to collect one of these powers only needs to build the corresponding facility o
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in
his area and if produced
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 is higher than his requirement he could even sell it to the government regarding the newly approved bill. In conclusion, usage of
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 limitless
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 will definitely take a great part of our future and because of its possibilities, governments should pay more attention.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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