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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree or disagree this statement?

#health #exercise
As it is said that to be perfect in
life not
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life, not
 only we have to be mentally fit but physically
also
.
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.
 For being physically fit we need to do work out daily
.
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.
In over county India there is no trend of having physical activity in
life but
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life, but
, it is lot
adobted
acquired as your own by free choice
adopted
 in western culture
.
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.
Being fit,
whichis
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which is
best
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the best
 thing in hygiene. Overall, as to sustain your
life
 in perfect manner you have to do exercise regularly. In earlier
time
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times
 of
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 folks use to do hard
work as, they
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work, as they
 work for
whole day
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a whole day
the whole day
 for cultivating the crop in
thr
definite article
the
 fields.
Furthermore
, we have seen that todays generation youth are very much involved in
workout
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the workout
a workout
 in the form of gym,
yoga
 and meditation.
Firstly
, As daily routine can be adopted by having planned and
good acitivity
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a good activity
good activity
good activities
 for
whole day
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the whole day
a whole day
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
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E
yoga
 is the best activity for
this
.
Yoga
 can be done by any age
people
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people, however
however
, it
does not requred
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does not require
does not required
does not record
 any
striength
the property of being physically or mentally strong
strength
strings
strengths
.
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.
Best thing
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The best thing
 about the
yoga
 is that we can fight with diseases without having the piles
.
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.
Although
, it is a long term
proccess but
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process, but
process but
, it is effective very much.In Indian culture
Yoga
concidered
carefully weighed
considered
 as the religious activity and
also
maintioned
make reference to
mentioned
maintained
 in the holy books
also
.
Moreover
,
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,
 we can compare the
life
spane
to cover or extend over an area or time period
span
spans
 of the daily
yoga
 person and not
yoga person
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a yoga person
,
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,
 there is a lot
differance
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
.
Secondly
, we can
concider
deem to be
consider
also
 todays type of exercises
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
Suggestion
E
 gym.Its
also
 have many side effects
also
 but, we can say that
its
the thing named or in question
it
 has more pros than
corns
an argument opposed to a proposal
cons
.
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.

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