You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter • give details about the concert • describe how you won the tickets • explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you.

Dear Jot, Hello, How r u? I hope you'll be healthy and wealthy.A long time has been passed to
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time for meeting and having fun with each other.I let you know that I won two tickets
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music
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concert and want to share
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moment with you by spending precious time
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inviting you.
Last
Sunday, I participated in
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competition which was conducted by Jack William
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Delhi.I got the
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music
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a music
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concert ,which will be held
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13march at Jaipur. It's a city known as pink city and
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know you're very excited in
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days to see the culture of that city.
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of
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to win
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to perform because they want to make our friendship bond stronger. I sacrificed my nights to get
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position because of reward, which
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knew how to get?
Lastly
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to invite you to come and join a concert with me. I remember you are a music lover.I'm very excited to meet you soon.I booked our tickets and do other arrangements regarding accommodations. Don't worry about other things.
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enjoy the old memories again. See you soon. With regards, Nannu.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concert details
  • artist/band name
  • date and time
  • location
  • guest performances
  • unique venue
  • concert theme
  • contest
  • raffle
  • promotion
  • shared interests
  • past experiences
  • attending concerts together
  • personal reasons
  • winning tickets
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