Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals, which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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From our early existence on the Earth, animals have been human companions.

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, the animal kingdom is on the edge of being completely extinct. Some people,

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, may believe that it would be better to conserve the fauna that brings benefits to humans. I am not going along with

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opinion, and will give my reasons below.

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of all, it is the animal's right to live and be protected. Animals are the friends of human beings but from the past, people have been killing these creatures for food, for furs or cutting down on the habitats where they live to make farms. In fact, they

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need to live in a world of freedom as us, with no animal-hunting activities that are just to meet our demands. It would be brutal to let them alone to face the catastrophe that has been made by our doings.

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, only preserving living animals that we can take advantage of can cause a great loss of the biological diversity. In fact, every creature in the world has many complex relationships with others and when one vanishes, related animals would be severely affected.

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may exert disastrous impacts on humans, too. These biological unbalances can trigger natural disasters which breed people's death and famine in developing countries.

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, preventing them from suffering from extinction would be the top priority that governments would rather concern. In conclusion, I am convinced that protecting all creatures that live on the Earth is extremely important as it

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means ensuring our lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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