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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently, a new neighbor moved in who has loud parties several times a week. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: •        Explain the situation •        Describe why it bothers you •        Suggest a solution Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Ronch

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Dear Mr. Ronch, I hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing to bring to your attention an issue I have been experiencing since a new
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 moved into the building. Over the past few weeks, they have been hosting loud parties several times a week that significantly disrupt the peace in our apartment. The noise from these gatherings often continues late into the night, making it difficult for me to relax or get a good night's sleep.
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 constant disturbance has affected my daily routine and
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 well-being, as I struggle to focus on my work and maintain a healthy lifestyle. To address
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 situation, I kindly suggest that you remind all tenants of the noise policies outlined in our lease agreements. Perhaps you could
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 consider implementing quiet hours in the building to ensure everyone can enjoy their living space without frequent disturbances. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. I appreciate your support and look forward to a resolution. Sincerely, Trang Dao
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Consider adding more specific examples or details about the disturbances to strengthen the argument, such as the exact time they start or other affected neighbors.
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Ensure all logical points are expanded adequately; although well structured, a brief description of how the noise violates existing policies might enhance clarity.
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The letter is well-structured and each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea, which helps the reader understand the issue effectively.
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You have appropriately included suggestions for resolving the problem, showing a proactive approach.
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The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is well-suited to a formal communication with a landlord.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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