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Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It i
s considers
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considers
is considered
is considering
that, it is not significant to have a lot of
language
 around the world and only few
l
anguage
Suggestion
languages
is enough to make our life comfortable. I completely disagree with the opinion and I think that, diversified
Language
 is crucial for each and every
nation
.
First
 of all,
language
 carries the
culture
 of a particular
nation
. In order to express the thought and expressions, different countries have its own unique
language
.
L
anguage
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The language
sometimes considered as the most important factor of a
nation
.
In other words
, a
nation
 cannot be formulated without a
language
. Due to the diversifications of
language
, countries are unique f
orm
a giver or sender
from
one another.
As a result
, we s
ometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
face
Language
 barrier while visiting those countries.
However
, we can learn those
l
anguage
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languages
and heritage of that country.
Therefore
, if a
language
 d
ie
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dies
out, that means the whole
nation
 will be destroyed.
For example
, in 1971, Pakistan wanted Bangladeshi people not to communicate over Bengali
language
.
However
, the people of Bangladesh never wanted
this
.
As a result
, they fought for their mother tongue and eventually save the nations from being collapsed.
Secondly
, in order to save the ancient heritage and the history of different n
ations we
Accept comma addition
nations, we
must have to practice t
hose
plural of "this"
these
l
anguage,
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languages
 so that we could discover the hidden meaning of a
nation
. As the world b
ecoming
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becomes
is becoming
older, we are losing some of the languages of a
ncient period,
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the ancient period
 which is a great lost for a
nation
 as well as for the world.
For instance
, scientists are finding the hidden meaning of the ancient Egyptian sign by protecting the
language
 of that
culture
. To conclude, I strongly believe that, in order to know about a
culture
 and save the history of a
culture
, diversified
language
 is crucial.
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