Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

Dear Sin, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
letter to
ket
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let
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you know that I can't go with you to see
movie
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the movie
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but I know another friend of
our
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ours
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who can join you
for watching
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to watch
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movie
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a movie
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.
Firstly
, I am extremely sorry because I had to cancel my
movie
tickets because of my business tour to another city. I know how happy we were when we decided to go for
movie
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a movie
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but at that
point
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point,
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I was not sure
for
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about
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the business tour.
Last
week I had
meeting
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with my manager and they told us that we are going to
the
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apply
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Chandigarh city for the presentation and you know it is very far from our city. So, our management
have
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has
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booked the hotel for two days. And
then
I realize that same day we are going
for
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to
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the
movie
. I am sorry, I don't want to spoil your
our
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day only because of me.
Before two
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days
I
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ago I
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went to see our mutual friend Gim, I told her about the
movie
we
are
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were
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going to see, she was very happy and she said she
wants
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wanted
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to join us you can contact her.
Atleast
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At least
now you have one person who can join you .I know I was so excited
for
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about
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the Dangal
movie
as I
was
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had been
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waiting for
long
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a long
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time to release it. But
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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the presentation is
verry
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very
important so I have no option. I hope you will enjoy your weekend. Yours faithfully, Sim
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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down some longer sentences into shorter ones for better clarity.
task achievement
Re-read to correct minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'ket' should be 'let' and 'verry' should be 'very'.
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The letter clearly conveys the message and addresses all prompts.
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The tone is friendly and appropriate for an informal letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear introduction and closing, which enhances its coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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