Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear Sin, I hope you are doing great. I am writing

this

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letter to

ket

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let

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you know that I can't go with you to see

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movie

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the movie

a movie

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but I know another friend of

our

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ours

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who can join you

for watching

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to watch

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movie

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a movie

the movie

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Firstly

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, I am extremely sorry because I had to cancel my

movie

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tickets because of my business tour to another city. I know how happy we were when we decided to go for

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movie

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a movie

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but at that

point

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point,

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I was not sure

for

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about

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the business tour.

Last

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week I had

meeting

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a meeting

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with my manager and they told us that we are going to

the

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apply

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Chandigarh city for the presentation and you know it is very far from our city. So, our management

have

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has

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booked the hotel for two days. And

then

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I realize that same day we are going

for

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the

movie

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. I am sorry, I don't want to spoil your

our

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apply

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day only because of me.

Before two

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Two

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days

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ago I

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went to see our mutual friend Gim, I told her about the

movie

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are

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were

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going to see, she was very happy and she said she

wants

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wanted

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to join us you can contact her.

Atleast

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At least

now you have one person who can join you .I know I was so excited

for

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about

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the Dangal

movie

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as I

was

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had been

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waiting for

long

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a long

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time to release it. But

unfortunately

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unfortunately,

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the presentation is

verry

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very

important so I have no option. I hope you will enjoy your weekend. Yours faithfully, Sim

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coherence cohesion

Consider breaking down some longer sentences into shorter ones for better clarity.

task achievement

Re-read to correct minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'ket' should be 'let' and 'verry' should be 'very'.

task achievement

The letter clearly conveys the message and addresses all prompts.

task achievement

The tone is friendly and appropriate for an informal letter.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear introduction and closing, which enhances its coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

246 words

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Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food nowadays. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?
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