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Nowadays children watch too much TV. Why is this happening, and what can be done to prevent it?

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ded up their day by watching some comedy programs. Lack of different activities in various environments and lack of friendship are the responsible factors.
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, there are many solutions which can help to prevent excessive use of television by increasing outdoor activity classes in society as well as organizing a boot camp or family picnic. These can give toddler an opportunity to make some new friends.
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, certain outdoor activities can improve their physical well being which can make them more active. For an example, In India children spend most of the
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 outside playing with their friends.
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