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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.To what extend do you agree or disagree

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Food
 is the main source for human survival. Nowadays, there is a vast increase in the consumption of
junk
food
 in many countries. The advantages overweigh the disadvantages of eating
junk
food
.
Therefore
, imposing higher taxes on
junk
food
 by the government is necessary to some extent. But, there are many more remedies to be taken to reduce having
such
food
. I personally agree with both side and my views are briefly explained in the following passage. On
one
 hand, individual's life became too busy in rush to their work.
Therefore
,
one
 has no time to have healthy
food
. In
this
 case, people prefer to have
such
junk
 foods available either at restaurants or on the streets called street foods. In these days, modern methods have changed the society with the new technologies. In a way that,
one
 can order
food
 through their mobiles and laptops from the place where they are. Indirectly,
this
 made humans easy to have
food
 and
also
 it saves their time. Irrespective of the
food
 what they are having people just see their comfort. Taking
junk
food
also
 leads to health issues. Neglecting the age differences people must be thinking about the health problems they may get by eating
junk
 foods.
On the other hand
, imposing higher taxes by authorities may reduce consumption of
junk
food
 to only some extent.
However
, individual's don't bother about the amount they are spending on
food
.
One
 is just looking for a tasty and delicious
food
 in order to have healthy
food
. As days pass on the quality of
food
 is
also
 getting degraded. The young generation now getting addicted to fast foods which spoils
one
's health.
For example
, when they go to restaurants they just order various
food
 just to show their status before their friend’s. After having considered all the points that I have mentioned above, we can
finally
 draw a conclusion that I personally think by spreading about the side effects of having
junk
food
 may reduce the level of consuming
such
food
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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