Many parents (mostly women) decide to stay home and take care of the family members instead of going out for work. Some people suggest that they should be paid by the government for doing that. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

The past decades have seen there was increasing awareness of
woman's right
Suggestion
woman's rights
;
thus
, some maintained that
housewife
Suggestion
a housewife
should be paid by the
government
for their job,
such
as taking care of the family.
This
essay,
however
, will argue that considering
houseparents
as a position is not appropriate, and my reasons are twofold. Admittedly, especially
womenists
a classical scholar or student of the liberal arts
humanists
can argue that they
scrifice
endure the loss of
sacrifice
sacrificed
opportunities of employment in order to take care of the family members;
additionally
, the reason why the fertility rate remains low is a lake of
government
's help,
laking
inadequate in amount or degree
lacking
income resources contributing to a lower lives
stander
.
Nevertheless
, it is groundless to argue that a lower fertility and a lower lives
stander
can be attributed
laking
Suggestion
to lack
lacking
looking
leaking
government
's funding. One
undisputable
not open to question; obviously true
indisputable
reason is that the fertility rate is not as low as those people say in some countries, though the
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
centuries
controls
did not pay for them. One obvious example is that in China rural most people's income
relys
have confidence or faith in
relies
rely
on self-reliance,
such
as farming or hunting;
therefore
, the number of people is the factor affecting their income resource. More people means that more food and a higher
lives
Suggestion
life
stander
, but some may argue
that the example only
Suggestion
that the only example
the only example that
exists in rural villages.
Therefore
, another reason why
government
should not pay for them is that in plenty of counties there have been a sufficient subsides to assist a family having babies and living in cities.
Thus
, paying should be out of
question
Suggestion
the question
.
Although
, the subsides is not enough to
surpport
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
a
whold
including all components without exception; being one unit or constituting the full amount or extent or duration; complete
whole
family, but at least it can remain a certain
lives
Suggestion
life
stander
in cities. In conclusion, subsides and self-reliance are my main
reasons beliving
Accept comma addition
reasons, believing
reasons believing
that governments should not pay for them.
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