In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The ways of how children eat and live are said to be so different from those of their ancestors, which made a negative impact on their
health
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. I entirely agree with
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opinion and
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idea
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with, the former generations used to eat a lot of vegetables and
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know how to balance the nutrition in their meals.
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, the previous generations were really healthy due to their healthy diet.
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, kids these days are not the same as
theirs
of them or themselves
their
ancestors. They eat a lot of meats and don’t eat
vegatables
edible seeds or roots or stems or leaves or bulbs or tubers or nonsweet fruits of any of numerous herbaceous plant
vegetables
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, the food they eat are high in salt, sugar and fat, which are really harmful for their
health
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.
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, the previous
genenerations
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
had to walk to school
everyday
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every day
, which made their body active.
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, they all did exercises.
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, our ancestors weren’t obsessed with homework, exams so they all had time to relax after studying. These days, children have a very strict studying plan that make them studying really hard
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after
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, they have no time no do exercises which do harm to their
health
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, kids have to face up with noise, pollution when going outside. Fresh air is no longer seen in the modern world. Facing up with these things, their
health
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will definitely be damaged
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after
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All in all,
children
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child's
lifestyle and eating habits have been changed really much compared to the previous generations.
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problem, in my opinion, can only be solved by encouraging children to return to move traditional ways of eating and living.
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