In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Granted, many sources of information have proven an idea of the eating methods and
way
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ways
a way
of living affected badly on
the young
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younger
the younger
generations. Personally, health is a
completion
something that is compiled (as into a single book or file)
compilation
of much more than eating and living aspects, it depends more on the genetics, which has been
improve
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improved
improving
gradually as the younger the generations get.
Therefore
, with the opinion, I have a completely different perspective. Other people believe that, it is hard to maintain a good physical and mental condition for youngsters as we are living in an industrialized society which is full of pollution and unhealthy food.
Nevertheless
, from my perspective, meals and lifestyles are different from the previous generation because they depend on what is
call
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called
: adapting.
Although
the habits are changing, they
also
bring us to a well-qualified life as what we eat daily is checked and provided with information includes their benefits and harms. In comparison with what happened in the past is that people just randomly eat what they can find, there has been many
disease
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diseases
caused by that spontaneous action,
for example
:
diarrhea
frequent and watery bowel movements; can be a symptom of infection or food poisoning or colitis or a gastrointestinal tumor
diarrhoea
caused by food poisoning.
Moreover
, processed products
such
as: milk, canned food is not so widely accessible as what we are having nowadays. Apart from that, the modern lifestyles that many people are following are nothing like
such
negative way as some channel on TV may described. It is much healthier as
next
-generation is more familiar with sport facilities,
for instance
, pools, gyms
,
Accept space
,
baseball courts are constructed in order to raise their needs to build perfect shapes.
On the other hand
, way back in the past, nothing like that were given to citizen, which leads to a lack of sufficient exercises needed per person. In the long run, it is undeniable that some aspect of life
are changed
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is changed
which make the quality of lifestyles dropped
compare
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compared
to the previous years.
However
, what are made always take a larger proportion than what have lost, efforts are made every
days
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day
in order to turn the world into a better place to live. It is more on our awareness to take care of yourselves than what the environment or what the community is forcing generations to adapt to.
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