In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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These days, in many nations, there are a number of changes in the aspect of eating habits and lifestyles of children

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compared

to past generations.

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has exerted

detrimental impacts on their health as well as their life. From my perspective, I totally agree with

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point of view because of some following reasons.

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with, most children nowadays have less healthy

eating habits than in

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eating habits than

the past.

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, many youngsters

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is inclined

to choose fast food

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of home-cooked meals. To be more specific, due to the convenience and time-saving, people can take time for other things

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as taking part in extracurricular activities or playing game rather than prepare a nutritious meal.

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, people all know that some Western countries can be considered the heavens of fast food stores

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as KFC, Mc’Donald, etc....

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low prices

the low price

a low price

and tasty food whose attractive advertisements can easily affect children.

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, children can be

overweight which

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overweight, which

leads some

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leads, some

more dangerous diseases

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as obesity,

diabete

a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst

diabetes

, heart disease that have bad impact on their well-being. In comparison, children in the past

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ate

more vegetable in every meal that can help them to stay in shape and be healthier. Moving on, the sedentary lifestyle of children these days can lead to myriad negative impacts.

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of all, by spending

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the whole day

a whole day

at home playing computer games of watching television, many youngsters gradually become lazier to take part in outdoor activities. Specifically, while in

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previous generations

a previous generation

the previous generation

, many children went out to play

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traditional, folk

games or

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their parent with farming, many teenagers in

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time are mostly exposed to technical devices and do not have time for outdoor activities. As a

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consequence

, they are more prone to serious diseases as well as being addicted to video games that can affect their studying.

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, the less strict control of parents

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also contributes

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issue

. Because of

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the heavy workload

, parents nowadays do not pay much attention to their

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child's

children's

actions as in the past, when self-discipline as well as health

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the priorities. In conclusion, the eating habits as well as lifestyles of teenager nowadays are completely different from

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previous generations

the previous generation

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issues

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issue

can lead to a growing pool of negative impacts that people should take into consideration immediately.

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