In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Over the past decades, children's development has never failed to draw public attention. It has recently been acknowledged that the eating habits and lifestyle of children has drastically changed compared with those of previous generations. In my opinion, I entirely agree that
this
trend has led to deterioration in children's life.
To begin
with, it is obvious that children's eating habit has changed significantly.
Firstly
, children are more prone to fast food rather than home-prepared meals. As a matter of fact, these types of foods are low in nutrition, high in fat and
calories which
Accept comma addition
calories, which
cause several serious diseases
such
as obesity or cardiovascular disease. These sickness make as a deterrent to children's development in cognitive, physical and mental terms.
Secondly
, it is clear that modern parents are too busy with their work that do not have insufficient
time
preparing nutritious meals for the children.
Therefore
, they are inclined to
eating
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eat
out, which may
results
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result
in food poisoning because food hygiene is not guaranteed.
Furthermore
, the way of living and addiction to temptation
on
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in
of
the virtual world has created
huge effect
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a huge effect
the huge effect
on children. It is said
that most of children
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that most children
in the modern
time
are addicted to video games that they spend almost
time
sitting playing games.They are no longer doing exercises and hanging out with friends.
As a result
,
this
sedentary lifestyle is no doubt deter them from socializing with others and gradually leads to anti-social
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
among children.
Comparing
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Compared
Comparisons
to the past, children were spending more
time
on sports and cultural activities like dancing, singing and playing which made them very fit and could get more involved with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
and society. In conclusion,
although
none of these changes could, on its own, have caused widespread harm to children’s health, there can be little doubt that all of them together have had a devastating effect. Personally,
this
can only be reversed by encouraging children to return to move traditional ways of eating and living.
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