In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It can be said that the way people eat and live has

change

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changed

dramatically in recent years. Children nowadays eat food and do activities that their earlier generation did not. I absolutely agree that

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change has brought harmful effects on the younger generation's health.

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with, children these days would rather choose to eat processed food than cook food themselves. Those fast foods contain a high amount of salts and fats.

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, canned and frozen foods are lack of nutrition that fresh foods provide. In result, children in

modern world

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the modern world

have

higher rate

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higher rates

a higher rate

in obesity than their parents or grandparents.

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, children lifestyle these days lack of communicating with other people which can cause depression and suicide. More and more children spend time playing computer games in their bedroom.

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habit has many disadvantages,

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, becoming addicted and easily getting sick because they never do exercises. In conclusion, we should notice that children's lifestyle and eating habits are different from several years

ago which

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ago, which

has many drawbacks on their physical health and mental health. People should cook themselves as well as

communication

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communicate

more to improve their own life.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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