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In the past, museums stored information about culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through the Internet, so there is no need for museums. Do you agree or disagree with this view

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Due to the advancement of technology if you want to get
information
then
 an
internet
 is an important source.
However
, Some people believe that museums are used to preserve history. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
 point as it demand more money to maintain
this
.
To begin
 with, if we store historical things in
museum
 needs continuous monitoring and
also
 maintain the record that which
museum
 keeps record of what item.
Moreover
, the Government has to keep it open all the
time
 so people can visit these places
otherwise
 they avoid to visit
such
 place if having only a limited
time
 period. Survey related to
this
 conducted in India says that people want to acquire
information
 in a fraction of
time
 while in
museum
, they have to spend a large
time
 even in some scenario they
also
 have to stand in a queue.
On the other hand
, using the
internet
 person can get an idea about any historical place or an
information
 about any culture is easily available to any part of the world.
In other words
, they can
also
 access
this
 same
information
 as many times as they want. Even details you get from the
internet
 is more so if you are doing research on some culture than it provides wider
information
 and
also
 do the comparison with other cultures. In conclusion, the
museum
 can be used as a storage of historical items, it needs more attention and money of government which can
also
 be used for other recreational activity; that will be found from as
internet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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