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Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence in tv, video games and other type of entertainment for children's leisure. How does this effect children? How do you think problem can be tackles?

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All over the world pupils spend their free time watching TV,
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games
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, and other types of
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 it more and more increasing. The majority of
parents
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 worried about it. So it is the effect for the future life. In
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 essay, I will discuss it and give my opinion. On the one hand, these days technology divorce is very popular with the young generation. They are using it increasingly. It can have a pros and cons effect for them.
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, the University of California them research realized that the day-to-day use of phones,
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games
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 and other
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 they decreased they are level of education.
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, they do not respect the elders. Because it is addicted to them.
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, my relative brother who after school watches TV cartoons. He is not doing
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any homework or other
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, someone who is addicted to
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games
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 they are very crazy about it. some of them have to purchase the apps. not only but
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 they become a mental case.
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, those who are addicted to the
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games
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 they are can not live without them. Since whiteout
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 they are playing it alone.
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,
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 worry about their children. In conclusion, pupils are addicted to
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games
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, TV, and other
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. so the cause is they do not do well in education.
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 effectively has become a mental problem.
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, in my opinion, the
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 can refer them to other
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 as sports, and music classes after school.
Parents
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 can not worry about it.
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