One of your friend lives in another country. You want to spend time working in that country. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, you should: •describe why you want to work in that country; •tell him/her about your skills and experience; •ask some questions related to work (wage, salary)

Dear Mandeep, How are you? I hope
this
letter finds you well. I want to visit your country for work. Well, you know
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just completed my GNM course and now I want to start a job as a babysitter before starting my BSc. Nursing in your country US, near you. I have a keen interest in my profession.
Moreover
, I have made
this
decision that start the job as a
gaedener
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gardener
or babysitter.
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I have
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2 years' experience in
this
field owing to
this
I want to gain more knowledge.
Additionally
, If it is possible can you find any family for me where I can live
as well as
take care of the baby
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Let me know about the salary per hour and if they need any documents from me
then
call me right- away I will send you all the required Papers. Hope so you will help me and I can say myself the happiest dude in the world. And we will meet every weekend. Lots of love, Harpreet
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coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are warm and friendly, suitable for a personal letter.
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The letter addresses all the bullet points clearly.

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