National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

India, is well known for its diversity and apparent of person’s is
also
important. In the modern world, most of people start to follow western
culture
; that way some believe that their
culture
will lose in the future. I agree with
this
as they think their emotion and beliefs were lost.
To begin
with, one of the important reasons behind is that they follow their
culture
and tradition in a way they wear their nation costume to show their moral behind that.
Moreover
, They all are strongly connected to their country and feel proud to be part of it.
For example
, In North India all boys wear dhoti and ladies wear a sari.
Secondly
, due to the availability of technology they try to follow a western
culture
as it apparent
first
time attractive so they use it. But, No one thinks about its effect on future generation as they forget their country and their beliefs.
Thirdly
, Person wears their cloth as well based on their religion and follow mythological stories thinks that their god told them that they have to wear particular cloth.
For example
, In Muslim religion they think like that and use the same appearance as their oldies used.
Lastly
, if you wear the same clothes as per your nation
,
Accept space
,
then
you are safe at all parts of the country; sometimes those who wear short clothes has to suffer from a problem
such
as, rape. At
last
,
Accept space
,
to represent the importance of own
culture
they wear conventional cloths. In conclusion, globalization is good for the growth of nation over the world
,
Accept space
,
but having side effects that it destroys the emotion and affect a person mentally, physically
thus
it will degrade the performance of the authority.
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