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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to student's sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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While universities allocate more financial resources to their libraries than students' sports activities, there is pressure on tertiary institutions to give equal allocation to libraries and
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 activities. I am strongly against equal disbursement to both libraries and
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 activities. The sole aim why universities were established was to improve academic works through research. It is
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 known that it is expensive to set up libraries,
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 the need for libraries to take up a major part of the universities' budget.
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 the main reason why we have university education is to enable many researchers and students progress in their
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 quest in order to achieve breakthroughs which would affect the world positively. To do
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 successfully, it is necessary to invest in what can bring
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.
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knowledge
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 can mostly be found in book, journals, articles and publications.
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 activities at the University level is mostly classified as extra moral programs. Students are
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 admitted into the University on academic basis rather than sports. Most sports students partake in exercises during their leisure time and many of them see it as a means to keep fit and remain healthy so as to give their education their best. Why will the universities disburse the same sum of money to its' main goal and to sports which is a leisure activity. Looking at the cost needed to set up and maintain a functional and an up-to-date library, we know beyond reasonable doubt that the library needs more resources than
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 activities. Many of the materials the library structure houses goes obsolete more frequently than a sporting equipment would go.
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 the libraries would definitely have more recurrent expenditures unlike sporting machines that can be used for a long time without replacement or repair. As an example, a journal about a research topic is published in many volumes, for the libraries to stock up complete
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 about
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 topic, she needs to purchase all these volumes as they are published. Whereas a basketball court can serve the University for a decade. In conclusion, while sports activities can generate funds for the universities through intra and inter school competition, I suggest that more funds be given to the realization of the universities' major responsibility: research work, rather than sporting activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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