The movement of people from agricultural areas to big cities caused problems im both palces. In your oponion, what is the reason for this problem? How can it be solved?

n
Suggestion
N
my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree that the young today spend a large
amout
a quantity of money
amount
of their leisure in shopping centres because it can bring negative influences on the youths and the society.
First
, spending too much time in shopping centres
consums
Suggestion
consumes
consume
consumers
lots of
money
Accept comma addition
money, although
although
they earn much money or not too much. For
youngwomen
Suggestion
young women
,
everytime
Suggestion
every time
that they see the product which is
saling
Suggestion
sold
selling
, immediately they buy
although
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
they don't see the cost. They spend a lot of money on clothes, cosmetic,
shoes but
Accept comma addition
shoes, but
they don't use it regularly.
For example
,
youngwomen
Suggestion
young women
see the jeans which
is saling
Suggestion
are sailing
is sailing
is selling
is sealing
about 50% and they buy it without thinking and trying. But later, maybe they just wear it once or twice or if it
isn't fit
Suggestion
doesn't fit
with
Suggestion
to
their body, they will throw away or give it to another person and it

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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