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Many people believe that the world’s most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration. Do you agree or disagree?

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A large number of people opine that the sole way of mitigating the most severe issues in the world is to take a global approach to them. I completely disagree with
this
 viewpoint and I will elaborate on the reasons below.
First
 and foremost, I would argue that these kinds of serious problems could be alleviated by means of local support.
In other words
, every country has its own role in declaring with
such
 worldwide problems. What is more, there is ample evidence to support the view that
this
types
Suggestion
type
 of local approach to many sorts of problems will likely to work in the long term.
For example
, it is much more straightforward to raise public awareness of
this
 issue in a particular country rather than in the international community.
Secondly
, I believe that it is absolutely imperative that we ought to take notice of local support. To be more precise, there would be ample opportunity to mitigate global problems if every person felt a strong sense of responsibility towards
such
 problems and made an attempt to take active steps to solve them. In
this
 case, the government should be in a position to help its citizens to be aware of the negative outcomes of these types of issues and encourage them
try
Suggestion
to try
 to participate in coping with global problems. In conclusion, as the two
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 reasons above, I strongly disagree with the idea that the only method of addressing the most pressing matters in our lives is the international cooperation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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