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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In
this
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 present-day world of technological advancement and globalization, travelling long distances away from home for work or for studies have become a norm, which results in an extensive use of either roads or railways.
Therfore
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Therefore
, the
government
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 has to spend
money
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 on developing as well as sustaining these means of commute, but the question remains, whether the
government
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 should direct more
money
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 towards railways or roads. In my honest opinion, both railways and roads have their own pros and cons and I believe that the
government
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 should invariably spend equal proportions of
money
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 for both. On one hand, we have railways
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is
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are
 undoubtedly a cheap and
ecofriendly
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 means of communication that makes sure the passengers reach their destination without fail
throughhout
all the way through
throughout
 the year in any weather condition.
However
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, trains are not usually safe if one is not very
vigiliant
carefully observant or attentive; on the lookout for possible danger
vigilant
vigilante
 of his
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
 as
picpocketing
the possibility of future success
prospecting
 in a crowded train is not unheard of.
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, not all trains run on schedule and on that context, some trains are usually
late which
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late, which
 can cause severe
incoviniences
an inconvenient discomfort
inconveniences
inconvenience
 for students and workers who are supposed to reach their workplace on time.
For instance
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, the central railways carry thousands of people everyday back and forth from CST to Karjat since early in the
morninvg
the time period between dawn and noon
morning
 till late at night, but only a few of these trains are on time and some of these trains are often more than twenty minutes late.
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, it makes sense for
govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to direct a decent
amout
a quantity of money
amount
 of
money
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 towards railways to increase the frequency of trains and build more tracks, which can result in a
profficient
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
proficient
 crowd control and time management, making
travelling
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travel
 more
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 as well as safe for the passengers.
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, private vehicles and cabs have an upper hand when it comes to
convinience
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
conveniences
 and comfort of travelling.
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, over-crowding of vehicles on roads can lead to increased release of fumes and gasses that result in pollution and global-warming, which in
unision
corresponding exactly
unison
 with broken roads, provides a bumpy ride to the traveller.
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, the roads in Bombay are not only heavily
cowded
overfilled or compacted or concentrated
crowded
coded
clouded
 and the traffic jam may end up requiring upto half an hour to clear up, but
also
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 have serious pothole issues which can damage the vehicle and result in a rough ride.
Therfore
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Therefore
, it makes sense for
government
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 to spend a
similiar
marked by correspondence or resemblance
similar
amout
a quantity of money
amount
 of
money
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 in repairing and maintaining roads as well as to construct more roadways and bridges with a broad corridor to efficiently manage the traffic and
consequently
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, pollution. Taken together, I would like to conclude by saying that the
government
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 should carefully think and plan out a
developemen
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
developments
t and sustainable upgrade for both railways and roads to avoid the overwhelming consequences of untreated and
unmanage
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d conditions, while savouring the fruits of either means of communication
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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