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Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree?

#companies #sports #facilities #communities
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Nowadays, people engage in the debate about
wether
introduces two alternatives
whether
 the companies are supposed to offer the communal facilities, like sports equipment, for local citizens. From my point of view, it is not a compulsory responsibility of corporations. There is no doubt that corporations
is
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are
 a profitable organization, not a charity institution. They intend to make more profit through their productions rather than entertain a small proportion of the local citizens.
Therefore
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, the duty of companies is to devote themselves
to create
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to creating
 more charming products, so that they need to allocate a large amount of fund and time to update the function and improve the quality of products. Only in
this
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 way that the enterprise can be run better gradually.
As a result
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, they may not have extra money to build the sport and social facilities for the people.
Moreover
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, if a company couldn’t be managed well, it is a burden for them.
Although
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 donating the public facilities to communities might advertise their company, there are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 good methods to receive a good
fame
a contest with rules to determine a winner
game
. To exemplify it, when some disasters occurred in a city where people are really in need,
it
it is
it's
 more useful and helpful for the company to donate their money to these damaged areas. It may generate huge influence and get an excellent popularity
to
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with
 people all over the country. Above all, it is unnecessary for the enterprise to provide the equipment for the citizens. In my opinion, it is government’s obligation to make a better city for people to live.

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