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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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It is everyone’s wish to lead a happy
life
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 in the today’s stressful world. It is difficult to have a universal definition of
happiness
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, because everyone has a different set criteria for its describe it.
This
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 essay will be discussing that a single parameter can't be set to define
happiness
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, and how good health coupled with a pleasant family
life
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 are most crucial factors to achieve
happiness
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 in
life
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.
To begin
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 with, there cannot be a unified factor which can define the
happiness
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.
Money
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 is considered to be a marker of
happy
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a happy life
life
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 as it enables us to meet our requirements,
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, it brings extra stress with it as every rich man can't be considered a happy person on
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 planet.
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, a recent article published in the Pakistan Medical Journal revealed that sixty percent of the elite rich businessmen in Karachi were depressed with their lives, despite having enough finances to lead a luxurious
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. Contrary to
this
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, someone achieving professional excellence alone, without enough financial resources, may not be happy as the lack of
money
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 will make him feel deprived rather than being happy.
It
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It, thus
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, clarifies the
difficulty
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difficult
 to devise a unified definition of the
happiness
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 based on a single parameter.
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, there are some crucial factors which can play an important role to get the true spirit of
happiness
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.
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,
happiness
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 will be meaningless without the physical health and well being. A person suffering from blood cancer is likely to remain unhappy.
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Even
 if provided with any other ingredient of
happiness
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 like
money
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. Adding
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, harmonious family relations are integral part of the
happiness
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. As per a recent survey report, published in The Times magazine, people having good family relations were found to be the most contented with their lives in the New York city as compared to the ones having more
money
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, but a disturbed family
life
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.
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, there are other crucial factors beyond
money
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 and professional achievements, which are integral
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to
 a happy
life
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. To summarise, it is difficult to define
happiness
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 based on a single parameter, rather linking of the various criteria of
happiness
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 will be helpful in achieving the
happiness
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. I hope that society will have a deep insight of
happiness
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 to ensure a balanced approach, rather than running after a single factor to achieve it.

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