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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that raising the lowest legal
age
 for driving a car or riding a motorbike is the most effective way to prevent accidents. While I agree that driving
age
 rise makes a significant contribution to reducing road accidents, I believe that other factors are equally important. On the one hand, I agree that increasing the minimum driving
age
 would decrease deaths and injuries. Youngsters tend to break the rules and get involved in accidents because of the lack of responsibility, maturity and experience.
Therefore
, the older they are, the more experience they gain. Clearly, older drivers find a solution to dangerous and unpredicted situations more quickly while driving than younger ones. If a person crosses the road suddenly,
for example
, younger drivers might be frightened and panic, older drivers might brake or turn the steering wheel
instead
. To sum up, I approve of the increase in driving
age
.
Nevertheless
, I believe that there are better measures to maintaining road safety.
Firstly
, the government should encourage commuters to use public transports
instead
 of private ones in order to reduce the level of traffic.
Secondly
, traffic polices should fine commuters heavily or forfeit their driving license if they break the law.
As a result
, drivers are likely to obey the law and car accidents decrease.
Finally
, the authorities should invest more money in improving transportation infrastructures with a view to creating better conditions for drivers. In conclusion, while raising driving
age
 certainly affects the number of car crashes, I do not believe that it outweighs all other measures.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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