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Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Write 250 words.)

Nowadays,
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 are significant cultures to demonstrate people’s identity and their nations
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 in
minority
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languages
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.
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, some people argue that funds and resources are unworthy to spend
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This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives and opinions below. In the past, there were thousands of
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 that appeared in our world.
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,
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 is noticeable that various
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 are disappearing.
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 is because previous generations and local authorities do not see the value of
languages
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 and
lack
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the lack
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 of preservation.
Minority
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languages
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 illustrate the culture, history of immigration and personal value.
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, many tribes in Thailand
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apply
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 lost their identity from
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languages
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blended
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 and
losing
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languages
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 inheritance
generation
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from generation
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 to generation.
As a result
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, culture
,
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apply
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tradition and
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and tradition
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culture
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apply
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disappear.
On the other hand
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, funds and
subsidization
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subsidies
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 are the prevalent elements. To be more precise, preserving other
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 causes difficulty in communication, huge amounts of money
spent
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are spent
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and
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, and
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 different
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 create alienation.
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, when Thailand was Siam before becoming a country, the Southern region used their own
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 to rebel
as
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 southern people did not consider themselves as Siam.
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, to preserve
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use
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requires
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 huge funds, time and
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labour
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.
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, preserving
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languages
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 can lead to a lack of a country's unity and investment in unworthy
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pursuits
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. In conclusion,
although
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 preserving
minority
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languages
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 is significant, money,time and effort are devoted to contribute
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, and
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 it is not worth it
particularly
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, particularly
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 in third-world countries. From my perspective, I believe that the government should use residents' taxes on developing their
taxpayers' quality
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taxpayers
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 rather than
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preserving
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 other
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.

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task
Answer all parts of the task with a clear view in the intro and a strong end.
coherence
Use a simple plan: intro, view 1, view 2, your view, then conclusion.
content
Give one or two easy examples that fit your view.
coherence
Keep sentences short and link ideas with simple words like and, but, so.
grammar
Check grammar and use plain words. Use common verbs and nouns.
lexical
Use common words from the top list. Do not pack many ideas in one long line.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
The ending states the writer's own view.
content
There is an example about a country to ground the idea.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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