Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Write 250 words.)
Some
people
feel that government
should pay attention in
preserving languages Change preposition
to
that
spoken by ethnic Correct pronoun usage
apply
minorities
because some believe that language
can be an important factor in connecting cultural identity with ethnicity and can protect people
from the feeling of isolation. On the other hand
, some people
believe that government
should not spend Correct article usage
the government
time
on preserving something that's does
not benefit Change the verb form
that does
people
in the city
and should spend more time
in
developing the industries in the Change preposition
on
city
. However
, I personally would encourage the government
to preserve the language
and protect the ethnic minorities
from the
discrimination and isolation.
The ethnic Correct article usage
apply
minorities
group
are nowadays starting to get less and less and some people
from the group
doesn’t
speak the Correct subject-verb agreement
don’t
language
of the group
anymore because the majority of the new generation are now moving to the city
. Some of the people
in the group
don’t want to learn the language
of their ethnicity because they thought
that it will not fit in the society in the Wrong verb form
think
city
so they would rather learn the official language
more
than the Correct quantifier usage
apply
minorities
Fix the agreement mistake
minority
language
and only the elderly people
who speak the language
are left. Some people
have a thought that government
should protect and normalise the Correct article usage
the government
language
and culture of these ethnic minorities
and don’t
make Verb problem
not
they
feel isolated because some get discriminated treatment Correct pronoun usage
them
from
the Change preposition
by
people
in the city
because of their nationality and language
. The benefits that the government
will get from preserving the languages of ethnic minorities
is
respect and admiration. The preservation of the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
language
also
encourages the people
in the ethnic group
to be proud and don’t
feel the shame of their own culture and Verb problem
not
language
, even though some of them have to move to the city
and speak the official language
but
they will still keep the Correct word choice
apply
language
and identity without the feeling of shyness of their own culture.
However
, some people
feel that the government
should spend more time
in
developing the industries in the Change preposition
apply
city
rather than preserving the language
that’s not official
Add an article
the official
an official
language
. Most of the industries can be grown in the city
and from the people
in the city
not from the urban area. Some thought
that it is a waste of Wrong verb form
think
time
to preserve and protect the
Correct article usage
a
language
that
is not use
as an official Change the verb form
is not used
language
because it just
Add a missing verb
is just
the
small Correct article usage
a
group
of people
who speak it, which will not make
Verb problem
apply
any
Correct quantifier usage
apply
benefits
Correct subject-verb agreement
benefit
to
the country and Change preposition
apply
government
. They also
thought that the government
should be more focused on improving the quality of life of people
in the city
more
than preserving the Rephrase
rather
language
that would not be use
in the Change the verb form
be used
city
.
Overall
, I personally believe that preserving and maintaining the cultural
and Replace the word
culture
language
of a group
of people
is something that should be admired and respected. However
, they
are still some Correct pronoun usage
there
people
who would prefer to focus on the development of the industrial
more than preserving something.Replace the word
industry
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