Some feel governments should invest in preserving minority languages, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. (Write 250 words.)

It is argued by some that the governments should invest to preserve
languages
, others think that it takes a lot of resources and effort. The
languages
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is one of the most important historical
culture
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resource
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of that country. There are historical backgrounds and knowledge of specific local people
that
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who
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used their own language to communicate
in
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at
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that time.
For instance
,
Thailand
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in Thailand
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, there are various
languages
. These
languages
have their own story, special
event
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events
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and important
culture
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cultures
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, which they wrote and passed
the culture
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to
their
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next generation. Nowadays,
the
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central education makes
this minority
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this minority language
these minority languages
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languages
disappear and hardly
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uses
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. In
this
point of view, the
government
is able to make a significant impact
for
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preserving the
languages
because the
government
organisation has more resources, funding and specialised
personnels
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personnel
that can make it efficient.
On the other hand
,
preservation
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of
this
cultural heritage uses massive funding and resources from the
government
to keep
this
particular language. There are those who feel that it's not worth spending time in
this
area because it is just a small group of people and it isn't used in formal communication.
This
is an ineffective expenditure to preserve these minority
languages
. In my opinion, the
government
should preserve these
languages
and pass them
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the younger generation. It might not need to be used but it can be preserved in the museum or city hall for people who want to learn the history.
Moreover
,
this
can make it a learning centre for children to visit.
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task response
While you address both views of the argument, ensure that the opposing viewpoints are more clearly differentiated and thoroughly explored. Provide additional arguments or examples to bolster the discussion, contributing to a complete response.
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Some ideas can be expanded with specific examples or detailed explanation. For instance, when you talk about resources or cultural significance, you could include more illustrative examples to enrich the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Improve coherence with better use of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas, making the essay easier to follow. Trying using words like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'for instance' more effectively throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next by linking the main ideas. You should aim for seamless cohesion between arguments to create a logical progression of thought.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that frame your essay well.
task response
You've successfully presented both perspectives on the topic and shared your own opinion effectively, contributing well to task achievement.

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