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Today, TV channels provide men’s sport show more than women’s sport show? Why? Should TV channel give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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Nowadays, there are more
sport
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 shows for males on television than ones for females.
This
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 essay will outline some reasons of
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 phenomenon and explain why we should give
time
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 equally to
sport
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 shows for both genders. There are several factors responsible for the fact that the figure for
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sport shows
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the sport shows
 for men is higher than that for women on
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, the most important of which relates to the fewer women in watching
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 and the higher demand for men’s
sport
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 shows. As the former, women have less leisure
time
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 to put their feet up like watch some
sport
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 shows. The heavy pressures of work and caring of their families prevent women from spending
time
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 for
themselves
objective case of they
them
 to be relaxed.
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 explains why the fewer viewers watch, the fewer women’s
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show
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 are on television. Another cause could be that some strenuous sports
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 as
weight-lifting
bodybuilding by exercise that involves lifting weights
weightlifting
 and bodybuilding which are mostly for male competitors are more attractive viewers.
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 means that the number of fans of these physically demanding sports is much higher than that of the gentler
sports
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sport
 which are likely for women. Men’s soccer games in Viet Nam,
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,
are attracted
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have attracted
 the viewers
attentions
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attention
 compared to women’s soccer games. Vietnamese are usually
spend
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spent
 their times for watching these men’s football games
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 of women’s ones. I would argue that
TV
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 channels should provide equal
time
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 to
sport
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 shows for both genders.
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, women
have
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has
 an ever more awareness on health, and television is the easiest approach to approach to transfer the
sport
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’s
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distribute or disperse widely
spread
support
 to people.
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, women can be inspired by
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 programs on
TV
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 and encourage them to do exercises to get healthier in life.
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, women athletes should have a chance to
show
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 their talents to the world, with the extended
time
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 on
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, they can have more effort to contribute their talents for country’s
sport
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. In conclusion,
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 the men’s
sport
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show
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 is more popular than the women’s
sport
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show
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 on
TV
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 for many causes, steps can be taken to alleviate
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 issue.
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