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More and more people relying on private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problem overreliances on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution

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In
this
 modern world,
use
 of
car
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cars
a car
 in recent time
increase
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increases
 rapidly by the
Peepal
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
, and
also
this
 become
common
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a common transport
transport
among
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between
 them.
This
 essay intends to address what issue it may cause in
humans
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human
human's
 life and give measure to mitigate
this
 predicament. It is irrefutable that people
have became
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have become
 reliable on private cars for their mobility. They commonly
use
car
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a car
cars
the car
 to commute to market
,
Accept space
,
work
,
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,
trip and so on, even though it is costly for them.
Moreover it
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Moreover, it
also save
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also saves
 their time and provide comfort which is not mostly available in public
transport
. There are many problems that
associate
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are associated
 with
car
 usage.
Firstly
, people will begin to experience sedentary life.
As a result
 of
this
 they will suffer from various health problems.
For instance
, many people will observe obesity in their health because movement of body decreases.
Secondly
,
this
 can
also
 contribute to traffic problems on
roads
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the roads
. Due to more
vehicles
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vehicle
 congestion, it will difficult for them to find clean air.
Last
 but not least
,
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,
risk
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the risk
 of accident would
also
increases
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increase
. To prevent various dangers of cars, people should take certain steps to overcome it. Government has to play a vital role for improvement in human habit. They should encourage and aware people by my campaign to
use
 public
transport
 for people daily commute.
In addition
, expense of public
transport
 must be reduced by officials in order to attract more
citizens
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citizens'
citizen's
 attention. In conclusion
,
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,
 people
use
 public
transport
 rather than their own private
car
 to isolate themselves from
various dangers
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the various dangers
 of Health and life, and
also
 take initiative towards their
oppulant
rich and superior in quality
opulent
 future.

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