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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is undeniable that the invention of
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technology
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 has made enormous contributions to various areas of the
human's
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human
 society and become more and more dominant in
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 fields as domestic life, entertainment and even our career. While there are still some people who argue that
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 has brought about much more drawbacks than the advantages, I do believe the opposite opinion. As long as we can take the control over it, it will facilitate our busy lives a lot.
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, with the help of modern
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technology
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, housewives are currently having more
time
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 to relax and enjoy their pastures as most of the household chores can be done by robots.
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, they can spend more
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 exploring new things or taking care of and educating their children better in case they are working mothers.
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, latest
information
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technology
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 plays an important role in work aspects. We can save money and
time
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 of travelling to the workplaces every day with the assist of a computer or a laptop connected
with
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to
 the Internet. Just sit at home and we can deal with a lot of work in the office via the social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
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 as Facebook, Instagram or the traditional means of communication as email and Skype. In fact, it doesn't seem to deteriorate our lives but improving it. We can focus on some cases when people failed to be the
information
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technology
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's wise master. Apart from being
usful
being of use or service
useful
 at home or at work,
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 is
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 changing our leisure activities in both negative and positive ways.
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, we used to play outside for a long period of
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time
.
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 why many of us stay healthy and happy with abundant experiences about the world around us. The presence
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on
 the Internet or social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
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 causes more and more of us to spend more
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 playing indoors that can be blamed for the increasing obesity of autism diseases
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in
on
of
 children and even some adults nowadays.
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,
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can be reduce
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can be reduced
 to the least if we manage our
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 and control our mind well. Vietnam has been experiencing the era of 4.0
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technology
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technological
 revolution for some years, which offers marvellous successes in many prospects. In the
time
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 of globalization, we cannot withdraw ourselves from the current development, so it is quite unacceptable to claim
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 argument as
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technology
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 makes us lazier and lazier. Almost all things include both sides of good and bad points;
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, provided that we can manage ourselves
smartly
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smarter
,
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 great stuff as
information
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technology
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 will be good device. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, based on the mentioned points, I strongly think that the benefits of
information
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technology
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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, we should confidently employ them
appropriately
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appropriate
 to have better and more comfortable lives.

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