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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinons as thet. Other people believe it's good to have frineds who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinon.

#people #friends #opinons #frineds #opinon
The
first
 chart illustrates the trend of British parent's spending money for their children for sport each month between 2008 and 2014. The
second
 chart demonstrates the three types of sports: Football, Athletics and Swimming which is participated by children at the same period. Overall, the amount of spending money for their kids had increased every 2 years.
In deed
Suggestion
Indeed
, the popularity of Football had not changed and Swimming had gradually
rose
Suggestion
risen
, yet, there was a turning point in Athletics's line. In the
first
 graph, the figure of spending cash for their kids had gently gone up. In 2008, 2010, 2012 and 2014, it had recorded 20, 24, 27 and 31 pounds respectively.
By contrast
, the popularity of Soccer which had recorded around 8 million students all over the graph was
unchangeably
not changeable or subject to change
unchangeable
 number one. Until 2011, Swimming which had recorded around 2.5 was
second
 and Athletics which had a few participants almost 0 was
third
, yet, after 2011, the popularity of Athletics and Swimming had interchanged, because that line had rapidly increased, so, it got over the line of Swimming and it had reached almost 5.

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