Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to local council. In the letter .give details of how you and your friends use the center .explain why the sports and leisure center is important for the local community .describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes. write 150 words.

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter to you to request you kindly do not consider closing the sports and leisure centre in our area. As you are aware it is the only place in our locality, which has an Olympic size swimming pool, it is used by many children to learn swimming.

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it for training purposes,

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me and friends we compete at

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level.

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, it is a very significant place for these people, because many of the local festivals are celebrated together by them here. There is a big open ground inside, which is used for

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functions.

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used for cricket and football training sessions to promote

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in house talent. Unfortunately, if the centre closes, there will a major loss to

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society. As the swimming pool and ground will not be there, many children who wish to succeed in the field of sports will suffer.

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, there won't be any festival programmes taking place which binds the community together. We hope you will consider our points prior to

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any final decision. Yours faithfully, Sonia Ahuja

Mon Feb 03 2020

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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8 paragraphs

191 words

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