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Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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Travelling is becoming necessary these days for every individual. There are various reasons for
travelling whether
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travelling, whether
 it is related to
official
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office
work
, personal
work
 or
anything
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 else. It has become a trend to
travel
 to another
place
. These
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essays
 will elaborate the reasons and benefits of travelling.
First
 and foremost point is that people are very busy now a days due to their
work
. Some people
travel
to
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in
 their company from home daily because
more number
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a number
number
 of people
work
 outside
from
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of
 their residence
city
.
For
example if
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example, if
 a person is living in a
city
 where
work
 opportunity is less he has to
travel
 to another
city
 for making career.
Furthermore
 the persons who
has
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have
 their own business, they have to
travel
 to another
place
 to attend meetings, seminars, conferences and so on. In spite of the above some people
travel
 to another
place
 to buy some
house hold
a social unit living together
household
 items which are not available in the home
city
. Travelling has lots of advantages as it leads to explore the other
place
 and its culture so that people can aware of different social values apart from their own. It can
also results
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also result
 in increasing the communication between different
people which
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people, which
 is really mandatory for living in society. People can
also
 explore the other opportunity
by
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of
 travelling which may be beneficial for their career. It can be concluded that travelling has lots of benefits for the enhancement of social values and
also
 for the growth of any individual. People can make new friends and it is very essential for increasing the communication with other persons.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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