Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It has always been the case that in certain ways our lives are intertwined with the lives of others.
However
, in the modern era, some people believe that dependency
between
Suggestion
among
people has increased, whereas others believe that people have grown to be more independent. One reason that people think we are more dependent on each other is because of our reliance on others to provide a positive image of ourselves. People are bombarded these days with pictures of beautiful models and people who seem to have perfect lives. Many
people
Accept comma addition
people, therefore
therefore
feel the need to go on social media,
such
as Facebook and Instagram, in order to post pictures and they need others to get as many ‘likes’ as possible.
In addition
to
this
, because of the hectic and busy lives some families lead, it is argued they are dependent on others to support them,
such
as with grandparents helping to take care of their grandchildren because the parents don't have time.
However
, despite
this
, overall I believe that people are generally more independent.
This
can be seen in the way that so many people live away from their families and lead their own lives.
For example
, families used to live nearby to each other, but nowadays people often reside in different cities to their parents and siblings or in other countries, seeing each other only rarely in some cases. Not only
this
, people prefer more privacy than in the past and do not require help from others, seen in the way that neighbours these days often do not know each other or interact at all. In conclusion,
although
in certain ways people are more dependent, it is generally the case that people now live more independent lives. Only over time will it be revealed as to whether
this
is a positive or negative development for society.
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