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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #education #children #years #age
The graph illustrates the changing of hiring rate from 6 countries: Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and USA in 1995 and 2005. Overall, there was a changing between the two of the years. After a century, all of the country's employment of
both of gender
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both gender
, male and female had increased across a century. In 1995, in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, UK, New Zealand and USA, the rate of male's hiring had recorded 55, 63, 70, 44, 60 and 59 % and the figure of
female
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females
the female
 had recorded 28, 55, 40, 50, 24 and 45% respectively. In 2005, all of the countries, the percentage of both of gender's employment had increased almost 10% before than the year of 1995.
By contrast
, the man's highest hiring percentage had been 70%, yet, it
had became
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became
 82% and it was from Iceland. The woman's highest percentage had been 55%,
however
, it had changed to 68%.

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