The illustration depicts the City Hospital map so that differences between 2007 and 2010 are distinguishable by this delineation. Multiple alterations are identifiable in the road map as well as the car parks.

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The maps
are illustrating
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illustrate
the access to City Hospital via City Road and Ring Road
using
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uses
is using
both public and private transport. The maps are before and after the hospital site renewal. The changes to be explained in the following paragraphs. In the old map before development, there is only one
parking shared
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parking, shared
by staff and public.
This
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shared
carpark
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car park
is located adjacent to Hospital Road. The bus stops are located along Hospital road on both sides. The recent map is addressing a major renewal in the hospital site. Two significant improvements have been carried out which are
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identical
at
first
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sight.
First
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, two roundabouts have been constructed at both ends of Hospital road which can minimize safety hazards by reducing
vehicles
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vehicle's
vehicle
velocity along Hospital Road. Expanding the car park by constructing a separate public parking and dedicating a parking to the staff is
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improvement. Moving the bus stops to the side of the road is another change which makes the area more convenience. As a summary, the hospital site renewal has made a huge difference to provide better and safer service to the hospital staff, patients and visitors.

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