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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have seen your advertisement for someone to teach Thai to your children for a year. So, I am writing the letter to express my interest in
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 job. I graduated from Teaching in Thai with the 1st Class Honours. I have had 3 years of experience teaching Thai to children aged 5-8 in school. So, I have ideas on how to conduct the class with kids. Apart from teaching, I am
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 able to babysit your children if necessary.
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, I am able to do the houseworks e.g. laundry, washing dishes, plant watering, etc. The reason why I would like to get
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 job is that I would like to gain more experience in teaching kids, as I will apply for a Master's Degree in Education next year, which requires 4 years of teaching experience.
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 job would be helpful for
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 purpose. Look forward to hearing from you, Virulpat Jearathananan

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more detail and one clear example for each point.
task response
For task response: The tone is mostly polite, but 'Sir or Madam' is not best because the ad is from a couple. Use 'Dear Mr and Mrs ...' if you know the name, or 'Dear Sir/Madam' only for a company.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow. To make it better, link ideas with simple words like 'Also', 'In addition', and 'Because'.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Try to avoid very short support. Add one more line in each body part so the reader can follow your ideas more fully.
task response
For task response: You cover why you are good for the job, what else you can do, and why you want the job.
task response
For task response: Your reasons are clear and relevant to the job.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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