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some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals.others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Global warming and its
impact
 on
envirnoment
Suggestion
the environment
environment
, particularly human beings,
has becoming
Suggestion
were becoming
have been becoming
increasingly important topic
Suggestion
an increasingly important topic
 of discussion these days. Some people say that the major and most imperative problem is the loss of animals and plant
species
. Others say that there are other important problems that need to be highlighted and rectified.
This
 essay will discuss both the views in detail, in forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, people say that the major environmental problem is the loss of animals and plant
species
. It is imperative to note that the absence of plants has greatly
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 the survival of wildlife and has
also
 produced a negative
impact
oon
located at or attached to
on
in
 the environment.
On the other hand
, several precious
species
 of animals are
depleting
Suggestion
depleted
 from the earth because of their misuse.
For example
, recent global warning issued by
WHO regarding corona virus
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the WHO regarding corona virus
.
This
 virus is being accused to be associated with the consumption of rare
species
 of snakes and bats.
This in
Accept comma addition
This, in
 turn, has had a negative and very terrifying
impact
 on our environment.
Secondly
, people say that there are
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
 of other factors for environmental problems.
For example
, depletion of
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
 is one of the major concerns of the scientists and its believed to be one of the reasons that the fire erupted in the Australian forests.
This
 fire resulted in
eviction
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the eviction
 of
massive number
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the massive number
massive numbers
 of
species
 from the earth, forever.
This
 depletion of
ozone layer
Suggestion
the ozone layer
, is believed to have resulted from the drought situation.
This
 could have been avoided by promoting and permitting artificial rains in the country. In
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, it is clear that there is no one reason
that is
 causing the environmental problem. There are several reasons, each of which is contributing in bringing about its effect on the environment.So, it is necessary to have proper control over these factors, producing an
impact
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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