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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVED THAT IT IS GOOD TO SHARE AS MUCH INFORMATION AS POSSIBLE IN SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH, BUSINESS AND THE ACADEMIC WORLDS. OTHERS BELIEVE THAT SOME INFORMATION IS TOO IMPORTANT OR TOO VALUABLE TO BE SHARED FREELY. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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Nowadays too
Suggestion
Nowadays, too
 much
information
 is being shared for different purposes, among which are: Scientific
research
, Business and the academic worlds.
However
, exists different opinions around
this
, despite some people think that it is a good idea to give all the possible
information
, other people argue that not everything should be shared. In my opinion, there should exist some filters about which
information
 is given, emphasizing in offering only useful
information
 to the
community
, and all
this
 valuable
information
 should be shared freely. People who think that sharing as much
information
 as possible is good, should put into consideration the negative impact that
this
 can cause to the
community
 if the
information
 is not treated in an adequate way. Sometimes working in scientific
research
 and the academic worlds, results with wrong
information
 are obtained as part of the investigation, so if
this
information
 is shared without a filter can cause several misunderstandings to the society or
to
being one more than one
two
 people to use
this
information
 to do more
research
.
On the other hand
, there
is
Suggestion
are
 some people, who thinks all the opposite, and don´t give valuable and important
information
 to all the
community
, in some cases, people have to pay in websites to download some documents, which is unacceptable. If the company, laboratory or university decided to share the
information
, everyone should access to it.
This
 would help the scientific
community
, where researchers cannot use academic articles because they have to pay for them. Sharing
information
 about scientific
research
, business and the academic worlds to the society should be taken seriously, not only because useless
information
 which is shared can be hazardous for some researches, but
also
 through sometimes useful
information
 cannot be delivered to the right hands due the fees. I considered there should exist some limits for the
information
 shared, but that all
this
information
 must be given free to everyone.
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