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You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

#house #friend #news #neighbourhood #addresses
Dear Rohan, I hope you are doing well. I wanted to let you know that
finally
, I moved into a luxurious
house
. Let me explain what the facilities are in my new
house
. It is a huge garden with a fountain gate at the entrance area and two parking spaces for my Mercedes and Lexus cars. Well, it has a spacious living room that includes a dining space, and a master bedroom with an en-suite closest which is near a separate bathroom. And
also
 3 rooms are individually allocated to different floors where we can arrange the party functions. My friend, you know that our childhood friends
also
 live next to my
house
 so that, we have known them for ages. Mostly, my parents don't have to worry about my children and their security reasons. Anyway, It's been a
while
 since to saw you so I want you to come and have dinner with us and at the same time you can see my new
house
. I am waiting for your reply soon. Lots of love, Hardik Patel
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a central idea and follows a clear, logical structure.
greeting and closing
Use a more appropriate closing for the letter to enhance the overall tone and adherence to the format.
single idea per paragraph
Maintain a single idea in each paragraph and concentrate on expanding and connecting ideas within each paragraph for better clarity.
complete response
Ensure that you respond completely to all parts of the task. Each bullet point should be developed equally.
suitable writing tone
Pay attention to the tone of your writing, ensuring it is consistent and suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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