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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business To what extent do you agree?

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Marketing and promotion is the best
way
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 to enhance the
business
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. Technology is increasing day by day, so people can promote things through
internet
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the internet
 in an easy
way
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 and gain profits in
business
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. I will discuss both points of merits and demerits in the upcoming paragraphs. Glancing towards my points of agreement
firstly
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, people can promote things through
internet
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the internet
. In
this
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way
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, they can gain more profit because with the help of promotion and marketing they can sell more products.
As a result
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, they get more money without any stress or burden.
Secondly
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, many companies paste numerous posters on the walls and write numerous benefits of the products.
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, people attract more towards these posters and buy products. It is the best
way
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 to enhance the
business
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.
Thirdly
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, many businessmen promote many products through social media because numerous individuals
use
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 many sites
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 as Facebook, Twitter. In
this
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way
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, people can watch about the products and purchased.
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, businesses will be increased if people bought things. Commencing towards my points of disagreement, many businessmen promote products through
advertisements but
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advertisements, but
 sometimes they face hurdles because if individuals do not like the products
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,
then
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 they send bad comments on those sites. So
,
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,
the
business
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 image will be spoiled.
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, sometimes businessmen can face difficulties because some anti companies make fake sites for those companies which they are unable to compete. They misuse these sites and post wrong information related to products.
Thus
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 the
business
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 will be vanished. To conclude, marketing and promotion is the best
way
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for
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of
 gaining more profit in
business
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. But sometimes, businessmen should be aware related to sites because if they do not show awareness
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,
then
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 the
business
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 will be spoiled.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visibility
  • Market recognition
  • Digital marketing
  • Social media
  • Search Engine Optimization (SEO)
  • Online advertising
  • Consumer behavior
  • Brand loyalty
  • Purchasing decisions
  • Brand identity
  • Ethical concerns
  • Financial burden
  • Innovation
  • Saturated market
  • Customer engagement
  • Traditional vs. modern marketing
  • Market trends
  • Feedback analysis
  • Adaptability
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