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Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that by declaring a global car-free day, the negative effects of
air
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pollution
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 could be limited. Another school of thought suggests that there are other preventive measures and actions that might have more positive results. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and explain why I tend to agree with the latter. To start with the positive effects that an international car-free day might have on reducing the
air
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pollution
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, the obvious result of
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 an action would be the reduction of greenhouse gasses, with less harmful gasses emitted from the exhaust pipes of vehicles. With an overwhelming majority of automobiles around the world using fossil fuels,
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 is indeed a big step towards limiting
air
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pollution
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 and related health issues.
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, people could be more inclined to
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 public transport or even
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 of
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, lots of other people believe that
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 could only be a temporary solution to an immense problem, which requires lots of other preventive measures in order to be dealt with.
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 preventive measures include the
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 of renewable energy sources
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 as solar and wind energy, as well as incentivizing the
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 of electric vehicles. Other solutions could be the
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 of biodegradable materials in packaging of goods and less
use
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 of pesticides in farming, which causes lots of pollutants to leak into
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the soil
 and eventually into the water systems. Regulated landfills
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 to those mentioned previously. In conclusion, while it is a step in the right direction, I don't believe that an international car-free day is the most effective solution to the problem and I think personally that, lots of other measures should be taken to preserve biodiversity and reduce
air
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pollution
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 around the globe.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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