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People are encouraged to get rid of things in order to get newest fashion and latest technologies. Do the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh the economic advantages?

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In the modern world, many
people
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 are willing to follow new trends and fashion.
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this
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 reason, they are keen to throw away old
things
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such
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 as technologies, clothes and accessories, in order to buy new ones.
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, these consumer
behaviour
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behaviours
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 can lead to fatal consequences. First of all, producing a plethora of disposable
things
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 can pollute the surrounding world.
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 to say, individuals can damage
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the environment, if they continue their habits of purchasing
things
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 for single-use. A good illustration of
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 is pollution, because many
resources
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 and materials,
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 as marine and natural
resources
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, are contaminated, because of disposal
things
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.
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, modern
people
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 should economize
things
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 in order to utilize them efficiently and save their funds. It is widely accepted that if
people
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 use
things
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 more productively, they can spend their money to purchase other
things
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.
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, they can buy accommodation or private cars, if they do not spend their money to purchase new clothes and technologies.
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,
throwaway
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a throwaway
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 society can expand manufacturers’ production and business.
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,
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 can develop companies, and lead
economy
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the economy
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 of the country to
the prosperous
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prosperity
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.
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, if consumers start to buy new
things
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,
instead
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 of using old ones,
this
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 gives an opportunity for companies to produce more goods and services.
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,
such
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 kind of behaviour can motivate
people
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 to earn more money, behaviour if they notice new items from other
people
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, they can intend to purchase these goods as soon as possible, and
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 desire can motivate them to earn.
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, when famous American company Apple introduces their new gadget,
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 as
iPhone
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the iPhone
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 and MacBook, many
people
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 intend to buy these items, and they work hard in order to afford
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 mobile phone.
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,
although
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 many
people
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 reckon that
throwaway
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a throwaway
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 society can be useful for the economy, others feel that
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 kind of habit can lead to
overuse
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the overuse
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 of
resources
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 and materials, which is negatively influenced
on
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by
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 natural
resources
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.

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task response
Address the prompt fully and provide a balanced argument on whether the disadvantages of throwaway society outweigh the economic advantages. Make sure to present a clear position in the introduction and provide balanced arguments in the body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction that introduces the topic and provides an overview of the arguments. Additionally, provide a conclusion that summarizes the main points and reiterates the position.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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