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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it so difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

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Undoubtedly, happiness is considered as a key to success. It plays a pivotal role in our life. Meaning of gladness would vary from
person
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 to
person
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. It would be certainly hard to define joy in words?
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, it is not an easy task to elaborate elated feeling of someone. For a poverty-stricken
person
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 getting stomach full, food is pleasure. They get joy in small achievements. On
other hand
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the other hand
, a wealthy and an eminent personality might have the luxurious life but may not feel contented. Disparate people have different reasons to be happy.
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, there are multifarious factors to achieve
feeling
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a feeling
the feeling
feelings
 of
delighted
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delight
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The first
 and the foremost is the personal relationship. It is the basic requirements to be in state of radiance. If there is good rapport between all
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relationship, then
relationships then
relationships relationships then
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 there would be no movement of sorrow.
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, another reason worth mentioning here is job satisfaction. Contented with work gives inner joy which can never be eliminated.
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 but not the least is
social status
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the social status
 of
individual
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the individual
an individual
individuals
. It is the most essential in today’s
era which makes
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era, which makes
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person move
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a person move
the person move
 to seven heavens. In a nutshell, It can be concluded that being happy and contented cannot be measured mathematically. Different people have different reasons to be elated.
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