The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

The car has certainly had some negative publicity in recent decades. Automobiles have been blamed for many of the problems that affect our
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as air pollution, traffic accidents, and the disappearance of traditional communities.
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the statement is a controversial one, I have to agree that the automobile has been a disastrous invention.
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there is no doubt that
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have been transformed by
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, with mostly negative consequences. The streets of most European
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, were built long before the invention of the automobile and were never designed for heavy traffic.
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, we see narrow roads crowded with vehicles,
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pedestrians are restricted to pavements for their own safety. The fact that some
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have banned
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and pedestrianised their urban centres is a clear indicator that automobiles pose a danger to our
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, in both urban and rural areas,
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have proved deadly to human beings. Not only are thousands of people killed each year in road accidents, but there are
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long-term health problems caused by vehicle emissions. The automobile industry has tried to respond to both problems with the development of car safety features and cleaner engines, but even these gains are offset by the increasing number of people worldwide who want to drive.
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, it is no exaggeration to say that the cult of vehicle ownership has become a monster beyond our control. In conclusion, despite widespread advertising that tries to persuade us that
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bestow status and freedom, the truth is actually that
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have been detrimental to our lifestyles and communities for many decades. Historians in the future may look back on our time and wonder why we allowed
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a dangerous and inefficient form of transportation to persist unchecked. I look forward to the day when viable alternatives replace automobiles once and for all

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