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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most peoples lives. other then adult life bring more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

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Above topic is to discuss which phase of a
person
Suggestion
person's
life
 is one of the happiest times of their
life
. Talking about the teen
life
, we do not have any responsibility of someone
,
Accept space
,
 we do not care about the how we wanted to save money and how we wanted to plan our future.
As
Suggestion
At
 most of the time in teens
life
 is around with friends, thinking about how to plan trips
in
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during
 summer breaks. During that age our parents are there
for
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to
 look after us. We can dream about anything and without even thinking about judgements from anyone. In short teen
life
 is carefree
life
. But in contrary, the
adult
life
 is full of responsibilities. As you grow older, there are people who started dependent on you.You have
look
Suggestion
to look
 after yourself along with your parents. You have to keep in mind about every single
steps
Suggestion
step
 and decision as
this
 will impact your
life
 in
future
Suggestion
the future
. But
adult
life
also
 teaches us how to be a responsible person. In
adult
life
 you get to understand the importance of money which gives a good future to the family. When we get
adult
, parents understand our situation very easily and they can give us advise which is very helpful to come to a point, by
this
 we feel very closer to our parents. Everyone has their own phase, but it is important how we can learn from each phase and find happiness in it. As we grow older the responsibilities will grow with time.

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