The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1
The first chart presents the total
people
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number of people
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who travelled
during
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for
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five years, for different reasons between the years 1994 to 1998. The data show that
mostly
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most
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the
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people
travelled to spend their holidays.
On the other hand
,
less
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fewer
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people
travelled for other reasons. The results show that a larger population of
UK
residents travelled abroad in 1998.
Overall
, the survey concludes that the sample of
UK
residents who travelled abroad
were
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increased with the passage of time. As far as the results of
second
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chart are concerned, most of the
people
travelled to Western Europe and from 1995 onward till 1998 visitors increased steadily.
Likewise
, after 1995 the number of visitors to North America and other areas
is
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also
increased.
However
, the
people
are less in numbers who visited North America when compared to Western Europe and other areas.
Overall
, the results show that the number of
UK
visitors increased with the passage of time, from 1994
till
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to
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1998, and
mostly
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most
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the
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apply
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UK
residents visited Western Europe during the same period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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