The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

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The first chart presents the total

people

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number of people

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who travelled

during

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for

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five years, for different reasons between the years 1994 to 1998. The data show that

mostly

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most

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the

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apply

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people

travelled to spend their holidays.

On the other hand

less

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fewer

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people

travelled for other reasons. The results show that a larger population of

residents travelled abroad in 1998.

Overall

, the survey concludes that the sample of

residents who travelled abroad

were

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apply

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increased with the passage of time. As far as the results of

second

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the second

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chart are concerned, most of the

people

travelled to Western Europe and from 1995 onward till 1998 visitors increased steadily.

Likewise

, after 1995 the number of visitors to North America and other areas

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apply

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also

increased.

However

, the

people

are less in numbers who visited North America when compared to Western Europe and other areas.

Overall

, the results show that the number of

visitors increased with the passage of time, from 1994

till

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1998, and

mostly

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most

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the

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apply

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residents visited Western Europe during the same period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

171 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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